Once upon a time – (Chapter 2)One more day in the fish market!

November 17, 2008 at 7:22 PM 11 comments

Continued from the previous chapter, The two poles of a magnet.

As the bus was nearing another stop, both of their minds thought the same thing. “Are we there already?”. Hurriedly making their way through the tightly packed bus, they finally manage to get down at the intended bus stop. Looking at each other’s faces, they smile sheepishly wondering whether the other saw the dazed look each one was wearing throughout the journey. “I guess he didn’t see me.” thought each one and started their usual bus stop to school chatter.

That reminded Aditya that he had forgotten his homework again. He was beginning to think that the teachers were getting bored of giving him punishment. Well, he was partly right. The teachers were bored of punishing him. They needed to change the punishment in the hopes that he will someday learn.

Kiran noticed that Aditya hadn’t done his homework again. He never usually did. He said – “Why don’t you do your homework Chinnu? Aren’t you tired of getting punished over and over everyday?”. Aditya looked blank. He didn’t have any particular reason. He said – “Look Kiran, I know everyone wants me to do my work properly so that I will get good marks and come up in life. But I am not able to set my mind to it. Something about it makes me feel weird.”.

To this Kiran replied – “I think you lack concentration. My grandpa always used to tell me that studying or doing anything related to studying is to be done in the early morning hours.” Aditya was confused. He always was when it came to studies. But Mathematics was one subject in which he excelled. He even liked Physics, Chemistry and Biology. They were full of very interesting concepts and theories. He studied each and every theory and the working of different machines that were mentioned in the text book.

But he also hated the subject as much as he loved it for one single reason. His teacher insisted on learning all of it by heart. He even fought with his science teacher arguing that the concepts are more important than the words. But she wouldn’t listen. All of them would just say – “Kiran, make your friend understand the subject properly child.”

Kiran was as annoyed at this as Aditya himself. He too thought the concepts mattered most. But somehow he could not understand the concepts that clearly. Though he excelled in remembering things very well. He learnt each subject by heart. He was number 1 in his school when it came to studies.

Seeing the gate to their school wide open and children fighting to get there in time like a flock of sheep being herded by a German Shepherd. They looked at each others faces one more time and said in unison – “One more day in the fish market!” That was how they pictured their school. A fish market where everyone had to wear uniforms.

Making their way to their class, they stopped their chatting and started walking earnestly. They then assembled with the whole school for the daily assembly where the whole school would recite prayers. Not only this school, but all of the schools stressed on this part of the daily routine. Though each school prayed only to the god the chairman belonged to. To which religion the children belonged to was not even a matter. There, in the young children’s minds the seeds of racism and castism are planted.

Finishing the assembly, all the children feverishly headed to their respective classrooms. Seated and awaiting for their teacher to arrive, the children started to talk and shout and do many other things expected of children their age. Silence fell as soon as the teacher arrived. A pin dropped by mistake could be heard from a good distance. This marked the start of another day at school.

Hi guys. Sorry I could not post earlier. I have many things to attend to. However, I will be posting at least once in three days. πŸ™‚ Waiting for your feedback. πŸ™‚


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Once upon a time – (Chapter 1) The two poles of a magnet. Once upon a time – (Chapter 3)A friend who will help.

11 Comments Add your own

  • 1. smallstar  |  November 17, 2008 at 7:53 PM

    Nice story, buddy… I like it very much!! ^.^

    however, you haven’t to be sorry if you couldn’t post it earlier… πŸ™‚ ok??

    *HUGS/LOVE/KISSES* for ya…

  • 2. apoorva  |  November 17, 2008 at 9:13 PM

    Wondering wat the story is about…!!! Bit curious u know… πŸ˜‰
    cant wait to read next part…

  • 3. vimal  |  November 17, 2008 at 11:41 PM

    have no idea where the story is leading to. quite different from how it was narrated in the first part..hmm…waiting for the next part, buddy !

  • 4. Reema  |  November 18, 2008 at 8:46 AM

    I agree with Vimal. How many parts are there?

  • 5. Nikhil  |  November 18, 2008 at 10:15 AM

    Hmmm… progressing well, I must say. But don’t drag it, man! I’m so curious! Post the last part next! πŸ˜€

  • 6. Anniyan  |  November 18, 2008 at 7:23 PM

    Yes it is different. I got a little carried away with the details. As I said, this story is not yet planned. Only the skeletal plot has been designed. In this chapter I kinda realized I was dragging a little bit. But I wanted to bring out the small details of how two school boys would feel. The story will continue with full flow from the following chapter. πŸ™‚ THANK YOU VERY MUCH FOR YOUR FEEDBACK

  • 7. Dinesh Babu  |  November 18, 2008 at 8:43 PM

    This is a very interesting and thought provoking story – “Though each school prayed only to the god the chairman belonged to.” – This is very true in all Schools. They preach the religion indirectly, which I believe they shouldn’t. It is better they teach something common like Meditation and have the students simply do that in their class room before beginning the classes. As for memorizing the subjects, it is all because of the Test system we have in India. It needs to change. Let’s hope this generation brings about that change.

  • 8. Dinesh Babu  |  November 18, 2008 at 8:46 PM

    @Everyone, you shouldn’t have to know where the story is leading to and how it will end. The idea of the story is in the narration of details. The ending of the story will only matter when it ends.

  • […] Once upon a time – (Chapter 3)A friend who will help. November 18, 2008 at 11:08 pm | In Story | Tags: class, exams, Friends, help, parents, punishment, responsibility, school, Story Continued from the previous chapter, One moreΒ day in the fish market. […]

  • 10. Anniyan  |  November 18, 2008 at 11:10 PM

    @Dinesh Babu
    Wow. Thanks for your encouragement. It helped very much. I am all the more excited about the story now. πŸ™‚

  • 11. Su  |  November 22, 2008 at 3:15 PM

    hmmm… given the fact that i know u in person probably more than many of ur friends, i seem to get ur brainwave. (not read the next part yet) so ‘l confirm if my instinct was correct in 10 more min! πŸ™‚


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