Once upon a time – (Chapter 1) The two poles of a magnet.

November 14, 2008 at 11:37 AM 15 comments


After almost 2 weeks since my last post, I had a wonderful idea for a story. I will be writing it part by part as I have not yet planned out the whole story. But first, a sorry to all my fellow bloggers for missing out on their new posts. Now starting with the story.

Once upon a time…

Darkness all around. He thought to himself – “Have I woken up early today?”. That was a nice change to waking up at around 8:30 AM and going to school late by 5 or 10 minutes. They should start schools at 10:00 AM, he thought to himself again. But now that he was awake, there was nothing else to do other than get out of bed. He lazily streched his body and tried to get rid of all the laziness. That done, he made his way dazedly to the wash room and squeezed his toothpaste onto his brush.

Not too far away, in a similar neighborhood, another boy of the same age has a little different schedule. He has a book in his hands and is ranting away as he tries to learn the book by heart. Oh yes, he was the topper in his class too. He believed that studying that early in the morning really helps in remembering things. He was right. He proved himself again and again by maintaining his distinction.

It was now 5:30 AM. Both of them go to the kitchen for a bit of tea. But there is a change in each one’s approach. The first was dearly called Chinnu. His official name was however, Aditya. He went to the kitchen and saw his mother already washing the utensils that were left unwashed the previous night. He wondered for a short moment how she could sleep so late and yet, wake up early. He went to his mother and asked for a cup of tea while he sat on the kitchen counter.The second boy’s name was Kiran, He went to the stove and lit it up. He put the tea pot on it and started to preapare tea for himself and his mother who was busy on the excercise machine.

Both these boys were of the same age. They were, in fact in the same classroom as well. And friends they were too. While one was the class topper, the other was an average student. It was not because he did not study. He could remember every concept that was taught in class. But he could not put it on paper the way the examiners wanted. This was new to both of them. This is not new to many of us too. There is at least one person in each of our lives that follows one of the aforementioned categories.

The 10th standard was taking a toll on each of their minds as it was a public examination and there were many chances that one would not get the exact marks they expected.

Coming to the behaviour and description of these two boys, one could easily say they were the opposite poles of a magnet. They were that different from each other.

Aditya – the class celebrity was average in studies, good in communication and sports. Everyone enjoyed his presence and missed having him around in his absence. Such was his jovial and social nature. He was the teacher’s favorite target for punishments. He never used to complete his homework or any of his classwork. The nuisance caused in class by him was also another reason for the punishments. This being the case, his parents were always nagging him to study properly and come to a good position in life. His parents were hard working and very loving towards their child. He wanted nothing more in his life.

Kiran – the teacher’s pet. One would get the idea of how this boy was when the phrase Teacher’s pet was mentioned. He was a good hearted boy who never spoke to anyone properly. One exception was Aditya. The boys were the thickest of friends in their time. Kiran’s parents were very rich and snobbish. They were very satisfied with their son and thought he did not need any attention to be guided properly. This senseless idea was the reason Kiran longed for his parents’ affection.

The time was 8:30 AM and both the boys left their respective homes to reach their common destination – school. They met at the bus stop everyday and exchanged friendly gestures. As the crowded public bus arrived, they got ready to squeeze in between the gaps of the people that were standing. Each boy’s thought is about the day at school. They are squeezed in the bus while they ponder over it unaffected by the crowd and noise.

That finishes the first part of the story “Once upon a Time”. Looking forward to your feedback. πŸ™‚

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15 Comments Add your own

  • 1. Reema  |  November 14, 2008 at 12:04 PM

    Nice! waiting for next part.

    P.S. How r studies going?

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  • 2. apoorva  |  November 14, 2008 at 1:33 PM

    Hmmm…Eagerly waiting to read the next part…
    Hey by the way..good effort.. πŸ™‚

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  • 3. Su  |  November 14, 2008 at 3:52 PM

    now, that’s some beginning to a story! good work… πŸ™‚

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  • 4. Dinesh Babu  |  November 14, 2008 at 9:47 PM

    Nice theme and well narrated. The build up was good. It is always interesting to write about 2 extremes and what happens when they meet. Eager to read the next parts. Good to have u back!

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  • 5. smallstar  |  November 14, 2008 at 11:24 PM

    Great beginning of the story, buddy! Right now I am waiting for the rest of it… :^p

    BTW, welcome back, sweet darlin’!!!

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  • 6. vimal  |  November 15, 2008 at 2:31 AM

    Pavan, that was a nice read. Aditya would end up being successful in life, while Kiran would keep struggling to be perfect. My story would end that way πŸ˜‰

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  • 7. Anniyan  |  November 15, 2008 at 9:14 AM

    @Reema

    Nice! waiting for next part.

    Thank you!

    P.S. How r studies going?

    Thanks for asking. I am actually very happy that you asked. Out of care or because you are a teacher, I don’t know. But I am happy that you did. And studies are going quite well. Have been balancing my project as well as studies pretty well I think.

    @apoorva

    Hmmm…Eagerly waiting to read the next part…
    Hey by the way..good effort..

    Thank you. I will keep you posted. Don’t worry. πŸ˜€

    @Dinesh Babu

    Nice theme and well narrated. The build up was good. It is always interesting to write about 2 extremes and what happens when they meet. Eager to read the next parts.

    I can’t say I created this theme all by myself. I took parts my own life as an example.

    Good to have u back!

    Its good to be back.

    @smallstar

    Great beginning of the story, buddy! Right now I am waiting for the rest of it… πŸ˜›

    Thank you sis. I will try to post as early as I can.

    BTW, welcome back, sweet darlin’!!!

    Thank you. Good to be back.

    @vimal

    Pavan, that was a nice read. Aditya would end up being successful in life, while Kiran would keep struggling to be perfect.

    I myself don’t know what the ending is going to be. πŸ˜› But I assure you that the story is not about who ends up how. It is about something else which you will see yourself. Hope I am not creating too much hype about a small thing.

    My story would end that way πŸ˜‰

    Dude, why don’t you write a story also? I would just love to read your biography.

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  • 8. jai  |  November 15, 2008 at 9:21 AM

    hi pavan,nice story.anyways i like the boy’s name aditya being called as chinnu.now i am eager to know about the future of aditya in the story.beautiful thought of writing a story.

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  • 9. smallstar  |  November 15, 2008 at 1:17 PM

    @my lovely brother Anniyan:

    eheh take all the time you need!!! We can wait… πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜€

    *HUGZZZZZ*

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  • 10. Nikhil  |  November 15, 2008 at 4:32 PM

    LOL.. Not fair, the rich kid gets good marks?? πŸ˜€
    Kidding, man.. Very nicely written… Think it through, before you complete it.. Don’t lose the plot… πŸ˜€

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  • 11. Anniyan  |  November 16, 2008 at 6:44 PM

    @jai

    hi pavan,nice story.anyways i like the boy’s name aditya being called as chinnu.

    Thank you. Your son is the inspiration behind the name selection. πŸ™‚

    now i am eager to know about the future of aditya in the story.beautiful thought of writing a story.

    I am more eager to know the future of the real Aditya. πŸ™‚ Thank you once again. One thing. Please login to your wordpress id when you comment. πŸ™‚

    @smallstar

    eheh take all the time you need!!! We can wait… πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜€

    Oh don’t worry. I won’t take that long. πŸ™‚

    *HUGZZZZZ*

    Ah. I was missing those hugs you know? πŸ™‚ *HUGS*

    @Nikhil

    LOL.. Not fair, the rich kid gets good marks?? πŸ˜€

    Life itself is not fair is it? πŸ˜€

    Very nicely written… Think it through, before you complete it.. Don’t lose the plot… πŸ˜€

    Out of experience of reading many novels and sequels, I have understood one thing. Keep the skeletal plot fixed while keeping everything else open. πŸ˜€ πŸ˜›

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  • 12. smallstar  |  November 16, 2008 at 7:58 PM

    @Anniyan: I am gonna wait for the rest of this story without hurry… Ok? πŸ˜‰

    many *HUGS* and *KISSES* are coming to make you feel happy… :-*

    Reply
  • 13. Oxy  |  November 17, 2008 at 3:54 AM

    Is this in some way semi-autobiographical ??? Tell tell tell…

    Reply
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