A polluted pond!

August 5, 2008 at 10:53 PM 17 comments


Silence all around,

What is that I see, so big and round?

And what are these shiny beads;

Which seem like lightning seeds?

Suddenly I realize that I am in space and not in my room.

Serenity all around that a pin drop sounds like a boom.

No signs of life; no matter where I see

But for the blue planet whom I dearly decree

That she is the one the only one

Who can give as well as protect life.

And I stop to wonder, why we destroy thee

Without any remorse, hate or even pity.

For you are our mother and everything beyond.

I vow that I’ll do all I can to stop you from becoming a polluted pond!

Hello folks! This is the first poem I have ever written. I was not quite sure whether I should write poetry. But my very close friend Harsha convinced me to give it a try. And here it is. Waiting for your appreciations and criticism.

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17 Comments Add your own

  • 1. apoorva  |  August 5, 2008 at 11:31 PM

    WOW….very gud effort…
    can v expect stilll more poems???

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  • 2. smallstar  |  August 6, 2008 at 2:34 AM

    WOWWW ANNIYAN!! I am trying to put myself in this poem and… I LIKE IT EVER MORE! Compliments, another very good poet is found! Hurray!

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  • 3. smallstar  |  August 6, 2008 at 3:30 AM

    You have been tagged! πŸ™‚

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  • 4. smallstar  |  August 6, 2008 at 3:31 AM

    http://smallstar.wordpress.com/2008/08/05/tag-from-hasit/

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  • 5. Anniyan  |  August 6, 2008 at 10:19 AM

    @Apoorva
    Of course you can. Expect more. But I think I will post them in a new page. I will be moving this one too. I haven’t decided about the layout yet. πŸ™‚

    @Smallstar
    Thank you. πŸ™‚ I guess I am not as bad at rhyming as i thought. Though I still suck. πŸ˜€

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  • 6. harshasrisri  |  August 6, 2008 at 10:30 AM

    Congratulations!! you just discovered a new aspect about yourself πŸ™‚ . you have stuff inside you dude. only thing is that u dont keep faith in urself while others do viz, ur father, bro, etc. you turned the tables about poetry and now its time to start spinning your fortune to your tunes. All The Best.
    PS:It may be philosophical, nevertheless, a genuine possibility!

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  • 7. Anniyan  |  August 6, 2008 at 11:54 AM

    @Harsha
    Thank you. But I still can’t understand how people can rhyme so well. However, I will keep trying and try to give my best to it.

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  • 8. smallstar  |  August 6, 2008 at 12:01 PM

    @Anniyan: no, you absolutely aren’t bad at rhyming, I must say it…

    @harsha: you are very right! I am agree with ur words, man! πŸ˜€

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  • 9. mystiquedew  |  August 6, 2008 at 3:07 PM

    *smiles*

    Very nice… Keep going πŸ™‚

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  • 10. Anniyan  |  August 6, 2008 at 4:26 PM

    @Mystique
    Thanks! I will. πŸ™‚

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  • 11. MAG  |  August 6, 2008 at 10:34 PM

    Man…….. looks like you have some good set of friends who are guiding you through. Ideally something that I ought to do. The good thing about friends is that you care and do everything that you cannot confess with your dad, mom, bro’, god, teacher, etc….

    On the poem, well you really have some good stuff that I am already aware of. You need to exhibit your confidence when you are around people, which you currently don’t. Poems normally is not everyone’s cup of tea……

    I just happen to remember my first poem……. very good rhyming words that I put together…. Those GOlden moments,……

    man…… keep this going……..

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  • 12. apoorva  |  August 7, 2008 at 9:42 PM

    thatz gud…put ur effort in everything n u can definetely do well…as harsha has said u really did discover a new aspect bout urself…hmmm…KEEP DISCOVERING….there is still lot to discover…

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  • 13. Anniyan  |  August 9, 2008 at 9:18 PM

    @MAG
    Even I remember your poems. πŸ˜€ In text books and notes. I would always wonder who you wrote them to. πŸ˜›

    @Apoorva
    COOL!!! I am like the Discovery Channel huh? πŸ˜€

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  • 14. apoorva  |  August 9, 2008 at 10:05 PM

    definetely not….u hv more capability than u think….

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  • 15. Anniyan  |  August 10, 2008 at 12:34 PM

    @Smallstar
    Sorry I couldn’t reply to your tag. The reason is mentioned in my newest post.

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  • 16. smallstar  |  August 10, 2008 at 1:04 PM

    @Anniyan: don’t worry!! It’s ok! πŸ™‚

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